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中考備考解析——寫作

發布時間：2010-06-07

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中考寫作評分標準

總計18分，其中內容7分，語言8分，組織結構（總體印象分）3分

內容部分：

7分，內容切題，意思連貫，表達清楚，完整。

5－6分，內容基本切題，意思大致連貫，表達基本清楚，但不夠完整。

3－4分內容不夠切題，意思不夠連貫，表達不夠清楚，離題目要求較遠。

0－2分文不對題，表達不清。

語言部分：

學生需用語規范，表達準確，無或少見語法錯誤，詞匯拼寫正確，句型使用恰當

語法和詞匯差錯每一個錯扣0.5-1分，同一差錯不重復扣分。標點符號，大小寫出錯，酌情扣0.5－1分。

組織結構方面：

1．內容充實，不寫廢話，上下文連貫，用語規范，表達正確，無或者少見語法錯誤；詞匯和句型句式運用恰當，多見好句型和習慣表達用語者，可給組織結構分。

2．一般情況下，內容和語言積累得分在14分以上者，方可得到組織結構分。

3．通篇句型，句式單一。詞匯貧乏者，即使無語法錯誤，一般也不給組織結構分。

相關數據：2008年，組織結構分為2分，全市抽樣平均得分0.2113分，得分率10.56%

2009年，組織結構分為3分，全市抽樣平均得分0.9分，得分率30%

近三年中考寫作真題

2007年	Things I hate to do	必須包含三個提示要點
2008年	Love around me	必須包含三個提示要點
2009年	I Want to Do Something for my School	三個提示要點僅供參考

Case study:

Things I hate to do(2007年總分16分)

Necessary points:
What are the things you have to do?

What do you hate doing most? Why ?(Give at least two reasons.)

Answer 1:

I hate to get up early and I hate to listen to the noisy music, but I hate eating vegetables most. Although vegetables are healthy to my body, they really smell bad. And I don’t like the food which is green. More importantly ,my mother always likes to cook vegetables, but they taste terribly bad. So God, please let the vegetables disappear. I hate to eat them really.

7+7+2=16(full score)

Answer 2:

There are many things I hate to do, such as: reading boring books, go to bed early and so on.

I hate to read boring books because I think it spend me much time, so I don’t like to read them. I hate to go to bed early because I want to watch more TV, I want play more computer games.

But I hate most to have lessons on the weekends. Because the lessons are not interesting and they make me tired. I wish I couldn’t have lessons at weekends.

5+4.5+0=9.5

只羅列了一個理由，語法問題眾多

Love around me (2008總分16分)

Necessary points:

Is there any love around me? (Give one or two examples)

How do you feel when you get love from him, her, or them?

What are you going to do to show your love?

Answer 1:

There is a lot of love around me . For example , my mother cooks food for me every day and always looks after me carefully when I feel sick. In addition, If I am in trouble at school, my friends and teachers often help me to deal with it. Every time, I feel happy and moved by them. I think I am the luckiest person in the world. So I want to give love to them in return. I’m going to do more housework and study hard. I’m going to help my friends as well when they have any question. In all, love is all around us.

I want to do something for my school(2009年總分18分)

Suggested points:
what do you want to do for your school?

Why do you want to do it ?

How are you going to do it ?

How time flies! I have been a student in my school for 4 years. In return, I want to buy much （many）more new books and magazines for my school. As we all know, books can enrich our knowledge. It’s very important for us to read books. But there are only a little(a few) books in our school library. So I am going to buy more books for our school. What’s more, I will share my own books with others. I think our school library will become more and more helpful.

7+7.5+3=17.5(個別語句出錯)

考前提醒：

1．Think before you write

(2009) Soon I will leave my school. I want to buy a lot of flowers for my school. I am very thankful to my teachers. They always help me when I in trouble . I love my teachers. I love my school. I will give flowers to my teachers. I will put these flowers in our school in order to make our school more beautiful. (條理不清，思路混亂)

Eg: My most unforgettable moment

Suggested outlines:

When and where did this thing happen?

Why was it unforgettable for you?

2008 Olympic took place in Beijing, I didn’t go to Beijing . I felt sad. If I went there, I was happy. So I went to the restaurant to eat delicious food , I watched TV on Nanjing Road. Then I telephoned my friend to come out to play with me. My friends all came. They laughed and played with me. We were all happy. We had a good time.(流水賬)

I waited for a long time for the unforgettable moment. It was coming soon. “Five, Four, Three, two,” As soon as I was counting “one ”, the second hand struck eight o’clock. Twenty-nine “feet” were going to every corner of the world at once: The twenty-ninth Olympic Games started in Beijing. Chinese people waited for a century to hold Olympic Games. Now, it was becoming true. All the people and I could not forget this special moment. On the eighth of August, 2008, the Chinese people…..

2.寫作文時，務必注意

1）語法（單復數，第三人稱后加Ｓ，動詞時態，語態）

I’m a citizen of Shanghai. Shanghai is a international city and it will hold the 2010 World Expo so that I can see many changes take place in Shanghai. For example, many building is building now. Also the citizens of Shanghai become friendly and kinder to others. A few months ago, I often see people who were sleeping cloth walking on the street. Bur for the time being, I can’t see these thing any longer. I feel very happy about the changes around me. With these good changes, we can say aloud confidently: We have got ready for the 2010 World Expo.

2）避免中式英語

我想讓學校變得比現在更好

I want let my school will be better than now?

(2009 I Want to Do Something for my School)

(bad example)

I will leave school. So I think I must do something for my school. Because it learn me more and more knowledge. Although I can’t do big thing for my school, I can keep school clean when I live school. I can’t think I can keep school very clean. But, when I see rubbish, I will take it into the rubbish bin. When I leave school , I will remember school. Because I am a member of school

(good example)

I want to make my school more beautiful in the future. The school gave me the sweetest time in my life . It enabled me to study in a warm and charming environment. I’ve learned a lot of knowledge here. Therefore, I’d love to do something for it in return. For example, I’ll keep the classroom tidy when I go back to school. I also want to donate some money for it when I have a job. In one word, I’ll try my best to make my school nice.

3)以語言正確為前提

多用好句型，豐富連接詞

表示并列：

表示轉折：

表示遞進：

表示讓步： though, now that, even if

表示因果：

表示條件： if , unless

表示并列： on one hand, on the other hand, in the same way

表示解釋：

表示舉例：

表示歸納： in short, in a word

表示觀點：I think, in my opinion, I’m sure, what I think is that ….. I am afraid , It’s common knowledge

案例：School uniform

School uniform rule has its advantages. First of all, we don’t have to spend time thinking about what to wear every day. In addition, we don’t need to worry about competing with others based on how we look. However, it has some disadvantages. Our individuality can’t be shown if we wear the same clothes every day……What’s more , sometimes the uniform style is old-fashioned.

學會同義替換

Like=be fond of=enjoy

Be glad/happy/be pleased with/be satisfied with

句式多樣

案例：Things I hate to do

There are so many things I hate to do, such as doing my housework, waiting for a long time, talking with a boring friend, getting up too early, etc. But the most thing I hate to do is to help do the housework. I think it’s just a waste of time. The housework is always dirty, difficult and boring. And if I spend too much time on housework, I don’t have time for fun. But a saying changed my mind, “There are certain things we hate to do, we must do. That is responsibility.” In order to be responsible for the family, I must do the things I hate to do: to do the housework.

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