第一次作文大家都很認真哦！不管是續寫還是銀行搶劫都寫出了自己的特色和亮點。
下面我們一起來欣賞、學習、分享童鞋們的作品吧~ 希望對你們有幫助！^_^
L6 作文之銀行搶劫篇請挪步至：
By Zhao Pingyi
They got away
The thieves’ car with thousands of pounds worth of diamonds (和課文有銜接) joined the traffic. Mr. Taylor immediately took a taxi and followed closely their car.
There is no doubt that it was a mad chase through the streets. Just then, the thieves’ car hit another car. However, it went straight instead of stopping. A moment later, the police chased both taxi and thieves. Mr. Taylor’s taxi stopped at traffic lights, while the thieves still went away. The poor taxi driver was stopped by the police because he had been speeding. Mr. Taylor explained the situation to the police and asked for help.
With the help of the police, the thieves’ car was found ten minutes later. It was on the side street. Unfortunately, it was only a car——without thieves or diamonds. In fact, the thieves abandoned the car and escaped on foot with the diamonds!
續寫給出的提示詞都能恰當使用。從introduction, 到development再到最后的conclusion，結構完整。希望句式多變化，讓文章更有層次感~
By Zhang Yifan/ Andrew
Seeing the thieves’ car joineding the traffic,(分詞結構用得好) Mr. Taylor took a taxi and followed them. Urging the driver to be faster, Mr. Taylor anxiously stared at the thieves’ car. At first, the taxi driver refused to speed up, but when Mr. Taylor told him what had happened, he drove at full speed. A mad chase began through the streets. (非人稱名詞作主語，又形象！) A few minutes later, the thieves’ car hit another car. The collision was so violently that the thieves’ car turned in a circle and badly damaged, but it did not stop. For Since/As both taxi and the thieves’ car were speeding, the police chased them with the sirens wailing. (for 表原因不放句首，Since/As可以引導原因狀語從句) Mr. Taylor’s taxi stopped at traffic lights, running out of petrol. Though two men inside were very angry, swearing and stomping (押頭韻，動作描述準確), it was no use. (長短句結合)The thieves had got away. Afterwards, the police caught up with the taxi whose driver was charged with speeding, for he had been speeding through almost the whole city. They refused to let him off, even though Mr. Taylor explained the situation. At last, the thieves' car was found ten minutes later on a side street, but the thieves escaped on foot.
第六課的續寫和原文有得一拼。Andrew很擅長用非謂語結構，比如分詞。這樣可以把中文中并列的多個動詞分出主次層次。句子結構也豐富不少。另一個值得學習的地方是小詞的運用，包括副詞，動詞短語搭配，以及連接句子的邏輯詞等，都能體現作者的英語功底的，不錯！
By Li Yang
They got away. Their car joined the traffic. Mr. Taylor was very angry and anxious. So he took a taxi to followed the thieves’ car. They chase through the street. As we all know, it is dangerous to chase each other in the street. Because of the thieves drove too fast, they hit another car. (Because放句首一般用來回答Why提問，可用Since/As) But they did not stop, they continued driving. At this time, the police saw the whole process of accident. He chased both taxi and the car which the thieves and Mr. Taylor were in. The taxi stopped at the traffic lights, but the thieves got away! Not only did the taxi stopped, but also the police stopped too.(also和too語義重復) Mr. Taylor explained the situation to the police. Ten minutes later, the thieves’ car was found in the side street. They abandoned the car and escaped on foot.
課文續寫結構完整，提示詞也能串聯地比較恰當。可以提高的地方是句與句之間的連接，以及長句使用，可以嘗試用一些非謂語結構。
By Huo Mengjie
They got away. But the thieves’ car joined the traffic. Mr. Taylor was very angry and hurry. hurried So Mr. Taylor took a taxi. They followed the thieves’ car. A mad chase through the streets, (這句話不完整) and the thieves’ car hit another car, but the thieves’s car did not stop. As soon as the police chased both taxi and thieves. Mr. Taylor’s taxi stopped at traffic lights. So he let the thieves got away. The taxi driver was stopped by the police, because he had been speeding. They Mr. Taylor explained the situation. Finally, the thieves’ car was found ten minutes later. It was stopped on side street. The car was abandoned by two thieves. To he surprised, the thieves escaped on foot.
后續發展從頭到尾比較完整。要避免小的語法錯誤，連接詞，時間狀語如as soon as等要學會運用。不熟悉的句型可以再翻翻看新三書哦~
