中考二模 | 楊浦區2015二模范文新鮮出爐 | |||
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楊浦二模原題: 94. Write a story in at least 60 words according to the followingtopic “Meeting My Special Friend For the First Time”
昂立中考名師李仰老師樣文: With all the people who are really worth mentioning in my life, I still can’t forget the very person I met the first time in my middle school, Linda. She is tall and thin, with long black hair and a big smile on her face. The first time I met her, she gave me the impression that she was patient and easygoing. I remembered clearly that on the first day in my middle school, I was absent because of severe headache. To my gratitude, Linda, our monitor, walked a long way to my house to help me with the lesson I missed that day and encouraged me to take heart. With her help, I made great progress. We shall all graduate from middle school, but the friendship between us will last forever. (123字)
內容分析: 楊浦區這次二模的作文命題中規中矩,是一篇寫人物的記敘文。文章現將人物進行一定描寫,然后切入到具體事例突出這位朋友給你留下的深刻印象。
精彩亮點分析: 亮點一:用With結構開頭,新穎。Be worth mentioning 值得一提 亮點二: gave me the impression that用了同位語從句 亮點三: To my gratitude讓我感激的是… 亮點四:We shall all graduate from middle school, but the friendship between us will last forever.結尾加入感情,升華全文 寫作小Tip: 人物類作文一定要對人物進行描寫,結合事例才能突出其特點。
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